Talk:Actor Doris Day dies at 97

Died
Admonishment from WN:5W&H: --Pi zero (talk) 23:02, 13 May 2019 (UTC)
 * What: Clearly say what happened without euphemism, melodrama, or indirection. [...] say "died" not "passed away".

Review of revision 4480680 [Passed]

 * I did happen to look at the edit history this time. Even before I saw this note here, I figured, "Hm, could cut back on that a bit."
 * can you describe the mechanism you are using? What actions are you performing before makign an edit?  Sure, some of these are going to be hem-haws and personal preferences, but ideally those would be the only ones.  I can't tell from your edit descriptions. (Note: I'm not asking "Why are you doing it?" I'm asking "What are you doing?") Darkfrog24 (talk) 12:26, 18 May 2019 (UTC)
 * My first few, relatively quick, thoughts.
 * Not sure what you mean by "mechanism", and it makes me unsure whether I take your meaning correctly when you distinguish between why and what. Your mention of personal preferences also seemingly may be a clue to what you mean.
 * My impression, off hand, is that almost none of what I did here was personal preference, though I can think of one right off hand, and obviously once one starts doing something one's own character can't help creeping into it a bit (which is another reason, besides independence-for-review, why I seek to minimize changes during review: I'm trying to preserve the unique voice of the reporter).
 * This may be an especially good opportunity for me to go through a fairly long series of edits and elaborate on each of them, and it might be interesting to see what emerges therefrom. Though, doing so would occupy a great deal of time for which there are a number of more immediate claims.  We'll see whether I can clear time for this.
 * --Pi zero (talk) 14:22, 18 May 2019 (UTC)
 * I meant "mechanism" in the chemical sense. Not "put the oxygen and hydrogen together and you get water" but "first this electron moves there, which renders that orbital unstable such that that electron goes over there." Which specific actions were performed and in what order, and what was the effect of each?
 * I don't want to waste your time or mine. "I'm removing this sentence because distance from source" is not useful because obviously if I thought there were anything wrong with that sentence, I wouldn't have put it there in the first place.  What did you do to the sentence to ascertain that it required removal? Darkfrog24 (talk) 02:28, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
 * See whether these videos help you. (Related task #18 lists what software can be used for this purpose) Gryllida (talk) 03:19, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks, G. I'll take a look when I have time. Darkfrog24 (talk) 23:35, 4 June 2019 (UTC)