Talk:Chinese girl who was hit and run by two drivers, ignored by eighteen people, dies

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Was the girl ignored by 18 people or were the drivers ignored?  — fetch · comms  18:31, 22 October 2011 (UTC)

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 * who was by two van drivers; Hit and run is not a verb. Needs rewording to avoid misusing the English language.


 * who was hit and run by two van drivers, then disregarded by eighteen passers-by - 18 passers-by disregarded the two van drivers? Doesn't anyone pay attention to van drivers in China?


 * last week shows the onlookers pass her' should be onlookers passed her; did it happen in the past, or are they continuing to pass her? Or what?


 * Should be hyphens in "Two year old" and "58 year old", as in "Two-year-old" and "58-year-old".


 * The local government is now looking to bring in a law ??? What is meant here? How is a government "looking to bring in a law". Does it mean the government is looking into passing a law or is the government looking to bring in a law from somewhere else?


 * whilst she lay cataleptic and bleeding ??? Cataleptic -  severe bodily condition, described in psychiatric pathology, marked by sudden rigidity, fixation of posture, and loss of contact with environmental conditions Really, is this the right word? She had a psychiatric pathology? Or was she physically hurt?

Needs editor familiar with English to fix!!!

"Rubbish" is a synonym for "garbage"
Synonyms for garbage - junk, refuse, rubbish, trash, waste.

Synonyms for rubbish -  Garbage, junk, refuse, waste.

e.g. The rubbish is collected every Thursday in Gloucester, but on Wednesdays in Cheltenham.