Talk:Detroit teachers stage sickout to protest working conditions as Obama visits

Review of revision 4152278 [Not ready]

 * I amended the lede to make something more lean as an overview. Re: the sources: the first and last ones are primary documents--should they stay? I removed the NYT link. The Michigan Radio and second Detroit Press links just provide context from previous strikes. If they are not necessary, then please feel free to remove them. Is this a good start? —Justin ( koavf ) ❤T☮C☺M☯ 03:14, 21 January 2016 (UTC)
 * It looks like it addresses things pretty well. Thanks for the notes about the sources. When you say they're primary documents &mdash; did you draw on them?  If you did, they do belong in the "Sources" section; if not, and you mean them to be available for readers to look at, they should be moved to a separate "External links" section after the "Sources" section. Remember to resubmit for review when you believe it's ready for review.  For my part, I'm honestly not up to another review tonight; it'd likely be nine or more hours from how before I'll be able to do another review, though of course somebody in another time zone might pick it up sooner.  (I'm on UTC-5.)  --Pi zero (talk) 03:45, 21 January 2016 (UTC)

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 * ✅, but it's a bit borderline. BRS  (Talk)   (Contribs) 14:32, 28 October 2016 (UTC)