Talk:Faust seeks Murphy disqualification in PA Congressional primary

This currently assumes a lot of local knowledge, I can't even work out from it who's country's election laws have been broken. --Brian McNeil / talk 19:37, 31 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Do the changes I just made help at all? What else is unclear so I can try to fix it - I'm from the area and the state, so I'm probably missing all sorts of things because I am used to it. Lyellin 19:41, 31 March 2006 (UTC)
 * It is clearer now, but you have the abbreviation PA two times before you have the expansion. As we're an international source you need to have the expansion on the first reference (with perhaps PA in brackets). --Brian McNeil / talk 19:50, 31 March 2006 (UTC)

Comments
I'll add to this section as I go through the article and source, so don't react immediately I may put something here and change my mind...

First point... "Commonwealth court". I'm a Brit, I assume commonwealth has an association similar to the games we just had. Since I'm pretty sure this piece applies to one US state then for an international audience who may attach a different meaning to "commonwealth" you need to introduce your usage of the term. Definitely not something you'd catch on to from inside the US. :)
 * Nope, nothing else - this was the one bit that confused me. What position is the guy seeking to run for?  I'd have another read, but that's something that didn't stand out for me. --Brian McNeil / talk 20:05, 31 March 2006 (UTC)
 * I see now, he's standing in a primary, but from outside the US the only primaries that are publicised are presidential. Down to what level do you have this sort of activity? --Brian McNeil / talk 20:07, 31 March 2006 (UTC)