Talk:Local government elections held in Balochistan, Pakistan

Neutrality
The first sentence is analysis, non-neutral. Likely it can simply be deleted without detriment to the article. --Pi zero (talk) 04:16, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
 * What you mean? Is this article not fit for wikinews? --FSCEM45212 (talk) 04:26, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
 * I haven't tried to do a full review of the article (I really can't right now; it's almost midnight where I am and honestly I need sleep). Most reviews involve some minor revisions; most articles have some things that need revising during review.  The first sentence here has some difficulties, which I remarked on above.  With some thought, I or some other reviewer may well be able to revise to eliminate the difficulty with the first sentence.  I mentioned it here for the benefit of whoever reviews the article &mdash; whether it's me or someone else.  --Pi zero (talk) 04:36, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Should I remove the first sentence? --FSCEM45212 (talk) 04:45, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
 * That's a possible solution. There may be other ways to fix the problem; also, I or another reviewer may be able to revise during review.  --Pi zero (talk) 04:52, 8 December 2013 (UTC)


 * I also note that the headline needs revision. Per WN:Headline, a headline should be a sentence (without a "." at the end); this one is currently a noun phrase.  Also, we don't use appreviations such as "govt." in headlines.  --Pi zero (talk) 04:52, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Then how can I change the headline to "Local government elections in Balochistan, Another step towards democracy". If you are capable of changing the headline, then change it. I wrote govt. in headline of article just because I wanted to shorten the headline as you told me.--FSCEM45212 (talk) 05:17, 8 December 2013 (UTC)