Talk:NSW Parliament passes alcohol-fuelled violence bill hours after drafting

Review of revision 2361146 [Not ready]
> The sentence about penalty notice (paragraph 5 sentence 2). I can't find some of those numbers, and there seems to be something missing because afaics they didn't both go to $500.

Already explained at the 0th section on this talk page: old values; new values in Crime and Other ... Bill section 5.2.

> The sentence/paragraph about bottle shops (paragraph 6). I can't confirm it used to be midnight, and the last clause looks wrong because the source isn't clear on the point, but appears to be suggesting that it probably wouldn't affect the big chains, which I took to have something to do with the business model of those chains rather than any exception under the law.

Again already explained at the 0th section on this talk page (last line). The big chains thing is indeed vague, and I clarified it in the article.

> The paragraph about Christie (paragraph 7). I was unable to find a lot of the details here. The source provided doesn't actually say he died, which is sort-of okay because a more recent source says he died, but there's nothing in these sources that says when he died and I'm pretty sure it wasn't the 14th. Nor did I actually find anything that said Peter's injuries were minor, and I definitely didn't see anything about postponed until March. Also, unless there's something that confirms McNeil was found by a court to have been drunk and assaulted them, all that stuff should be qualified with "allegedly".

Source added. (Thought I did, but I appear to have missed it.) I have added "allegedly", since I don't have a source which verifies the offense formally.
 * ... the source was published on 14th, but cites "last Saturday", so I corrected the date in the article.

> I was somewhat surprised there was no mention here of the Greens. Seems like some mention of objections to the bill would be desirable for neutrality.

Done.

--Gryllida 10:25, 1 February 2014 (UTC)