Talk:Police in Texas arrest man eating dead girlfriend

Criticism aimed at tightening up the article

 * The following comment was posted on the opinions page. It belongs here instead, it is a genuine attempt to say how the article could be improved. --Brian McNeil / talk 19:42, 7 January 2008 (UTC)

The story, as written, is rather muddled. The guy stabs his girlfriend to death ... putting the body out in the garage and mutilating it. The girl's mother comes over and is directed to go look at the body, then the mother runs out fo the house to flag down a police car; meanwhile the guy is theatrically calling the police himself while cooking up portions of the deceased. At some other time he is alleged to have stabbed his ex-wife's boyfriend and to have committed some sort of breaking and entry. The timeline is a bit unclear. I would re-organize the story around the main sequence events, starting with the headline, then going back to the victim's mother and the police report (was the car that the mother flagged down heading towards the residence because of the call made by the alleged perpetrator?). The other crimes should be a passing reference in the last sentence. (Something like: "McCuin is also charged with other crimes in connection with an earlier stabbing of his ex-wife's boyfriend and the breaking and entry into a local business which occured within XXX days before the arrest"). 158.140.1.25 19:39, 7 January 2008 (UTC)

Inaccuracies
I believe it was not Shearer's mother but rather McCuin's that was directed to look in the garbage by McCuin. According to one article his mother was also with her boyfriend; but everything I've read indicates it was his mother that saw the parts and left the house. This is a rather important detail - the notion that a mother was directed by her daughter's boyfriend to look in the garbage where she would discover her missing daughter's body parts is somehow more disturbing than the mother of the killer looking in. No, not necessarily 'more' disturbing, but, very different at least. Additionally, the other crimes (breaking and entering, beating ex-wife's husband, etc.) came after he murdered his girlfriend but before he called the police/his mother.24.9.66.17 14:50, 8 January 2008 (UTC)