User talk:AO683

-- Wikinews Welcome (talk) 01:23, 11 April 2013 (UTC)

Prague explosion injures dozens
Hi AO683, please take a look at a few quick notes I left about the story at the article talk page, they may help to speed up the review and publish process. Again, welcome to Wikinews. Gryllida 11:07, 29 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Published. Congrats!  Please see the review comments and other feedback on the talk page, and .  --Pi zero (talk) 17:38, 29 April 2013 (UTC)

Student template
Am I correct that you're a UoW student? You'd left a UoW student template on the article; that template is meant to be put on the student's user page, so I moved it there. --Pi zero (talk) 14:58, 29 April 2013 (UTC)

Policeman in China detained for hurling infant
I have reviewed Policeman in China detained for hurling infant and left feedback at Talk:Policeman in China detained for hurling infant. The two major problems are lack of establishing newsworthiness as a function of time and the large number of sources. --LauraHale (talk) 08:39, 19 August 2013 (UTC)

Screencasts of some of today's reviews
The six videos are screencasts of reviews done today. As a whole, all the articles have improved tremendously from when they students first submitted. Now, they have infoboxes. They usually have a relevant picture, most of the time giving credit to the photographer. They more often than not have categories. The external links are not in the body. The sources are more consistently and better formatted. These little changes make a huge difference for motivation when reviewing because they show reviewers students are listening to feedback and attempting to get things published according to community standards.

That said, the current issues get to the more difficult spot of issues with making sure inverted pyramid style reporting is done, plagiarism and very close paragraphing need to be better avoided, facts need to match facts conveyed in sources, and relative dating needs to be better done. These are on one level the much harder part of doing good reporting on Wikinews. The screencasts of reviews included from the batch I reviewed this morning are more so you can see that what we are (I am) thinking when we are (I am) reviewing. This may not be educational in terms of teaching you how to report, but it might give you insight into what we are looking for. Hopefully that can be a little bit helpful in terms of understanding what we as a community on Wikinews are looking for in publishable works. --LauraHale (talk) 11:31, 19 August 2013 (UTC)

Thanks
Thank you for working on the Iraq shootings/bombings article that I started. You're awesome. Theonesean (talk) 20:09, 26 August 2013 (UTC)

Policeman in China article
An excellent effort!! Remember: focus the article around a "fresh" event. You'll learn, honestly, that 1 'event' can easily yield 2 - 3 articles over time.....but each has to stand (in a 'fresh' sense) on its own 2 feet! The outrage could've been an article unto itself; his initial detenion couldn've been an article; the baby being injured could've been an article [I am aware, however, that with sythesis article, all that can be easier said than done.] Keep at it! --Bddpaux (talk) 14:56, 12 September 2013 (UTC)

Hmmmmmm........
I notice you ready'd the Port Kembla article a mere 10 minute after Pi Zero had not ready'd it. I couldn't find that you'd made (in that, or any later edit) many meaningful changes or additions. Ready'ing an article without doing anything to ACTUALLY MAKE IT READY is considered disruptive here. I want to be fair, though: did I miss some noteworthy edits on your part? If I did, please point them out to me and accept my apologies in advance. --Bddpaux (talk) 01:18, 14 October 2013 (UTC)
 * I falsely accused you.....it was actually the originator who ready'd it, not you. You did a bit to help, and no harm done in your actions! --Bddpaux (talk) 01:23, 14 October 2013 (UTC)

Port Kembla, New South Wales residents keep faith in their region
Hi. I have marked the article not ready for review and left feedback on Talk:Port Kembla, New South Wales residents keep faith in their region. The article does not make clear why this is news now. There is no sense of time. The word current is used, but does not give an idea of what this means. (The earth is currently not in an ice age. The kitten is currently sitting in my lap.  Both have different perspectives on the factual amount of time that current means.  This needs clarity for the sake of accuracy.)  At this point, I would suggest refocusing the article on the interview aspect in the very first paragraph. Make the article about the interview, and use the sources to provide supplemental information to compliment the interview. --LauraHale (talk) 07:47, 16 October 2013 (UTC)

'Migrant' murder sparks racially charged riots in Moscow, Russia
Hi. I've reviewed the article and left feedback at Talk:'Migrant' murder sparks racially charged riots in Moscow, Russia. Given the slowness of our getting reviews done at the moment, the article lead needs to be supported by a second source and the article needs a rename to stay newsworthy. --LauraHale (talk) 09:21, 16 October 2013 (UTC)

Philippines left devastated by worst typhoon in nations history
Hi. I have reviewed Philippines left devastated by worst typhoon in nations history. The article was marked not ready and feedback explaining why was left at Talk:Philippines left devastated by worst typhoon in nations history. Please address these comments and resubmit. :) --LauraHale (talk) 12:17, 11 November 2013 (UTC)

4.8 magnitude earthquake devastates typhoon-ravished Philippines
This has failed review again, but on more-serious grounds than previously.

Yes, there was indeed another small quake in the Philippines; but, there is no mention whatsoever of this in the Telegraph source you've added to the article. That is referring to the Typhoon exacerbating issues for one part of the country hit by a quake about three weeks ago!

This strongly suggests you've seen a TV news report &mdash; or something of that ilk, which mentioned the latest quake &mdash; and simply thrown the first source that you found mentioning Philippines and earthquake onto the article.

You are required to read every single source you cite, because anyone reviewing your submissions will. Laziness gets caught out, and does not reflect well when glaring errors like this come to light. --Brian McNeil / talk 09:52, 13 November 2013 (UTC)