User talk:Bhavik Grover

-- Wikinews Welcome (talk) 14:10, 30 July 2019 (UTC)

Contributing
Hi. Noticed you'd submitted an article. A suggestion. The first article a newcomer submits to Wikinews is pretty sure to have some problems &mdash; there's a lot of stuff on our initial learning curve, from major site policy to details of house style &mdash; so there's pretty sure to be a bunch of feedback in that first review. It's generally a good idea, therefore, to see what feedback one gets on that first article before submitting more. --Pi zero (talk) 16:30, 30 July 2019 (UTC)

Influential Russian LGBT activist found dead in Saint Petersburg, Russia
Hi. This is fairly clean copy that gets right a number of points that newcomers often miss. It also, quite unsurprisingly for a first submission to Wikinews, misses some points, of course; see my review comments, and the . --Pi zero (talk) 17:59, 30 July 2019 (UTC)

Re: Romanian police chief fired after teenage girl’s emergency calls went unattended
Hi Bhavik Grover!

Welcome to Wikinews!!! :-) Glad to see you here.

In this story the paragraphs are only one sentence long. It is better to have 2-3 sentences per paragraph. I think then it is easier to read.

It is a sad but remarkable event. Thank you for sharing it. --Gryllida (talk) 00:21, 31 July 2019 (UTC)
 * I've made the paragraphs longer now. If you think they can be improved, please just edit the story. If you need any help please let me know. Gryllida (talk) 00:22, 31 July 2019 (UTC)

Three people stabbed in Hong Kong after sharing their opinion on anti-government protests
Hi Bhavik Grover.

Interesting story. Thanks for sharing. :-)

I'd suggest to mention the successful arrest in the first paragraph.

--Gryllida (talk) 23:52, 20 August 2019 (UTC)