User talk:Braxtonryn

-- Wikinews Welcome (talk) 09:33, 19 January 2018 (UTC)

The Truth about the Diversity Visa Lottery.
I understand that you are eager to have your first article published, but it is simply not ready. Please concentrate on an event that occurred in the last 2-3 days. Read the style guide. In lieu of that, look at some of our other published articles and get a sense of the style and structure. Also, at a glance, I think your article might run afoul of our WN:NPOV policy. Cheers and happy editing, --SVTCobra 13:36, 19 January 2018 (UTC)
 * I was trying to guide you to writing a publishable article, but if you insist on putting it up for what is sure to be a failing review, so be it. --SVTCobra 16:15, 19 January 2018 (UTC)
 * I'm sorry. I did take your advice and I read the Wikinews:Style guide and Wikinews:Neutral point of view and have made a LOT of changes. I'm new,but I'm very passionate about this, so any advice is appreciated! Thanks!

Hi! Passion for journalism is good. As a new arrival at Wikinews, you need to learn the basics here so you can apply your energy efficiently to producing articles that pass review smoothly. (Once you get the hang of it, hopefully, you'll find it will be quite straightforward to write articles that will have no major problems during review.) I've tried to explain a bit more about this article in my latest review comments. I recommend reading WN:PILLARS, then WN:WRITE. --Pi zero (talk) 17:08, 19 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks a lot! It's been less than a day and I'm already learning SOO much about writing! I'm gonna re-write/structure the aricle and submit it for re-review! Thanks a lot!
 * I've written another set of review comments. --Pi zero (talk) 21:37, 19 January 2018 (UTC)

Tips: avoid sections and a table-of-content. Avoid lists in favor of brief layman's sentences. Do focus on what has been done or said in the last day or so. Avoid using Op-Ed pieces as sources. Better to use the State Department. As for your map, it doesn't explain anything about the color-coding. Obviously, that should be fixed. --SVTCobra 22:58, 19 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Oh, and the title. I don't know if Wikinews is in a position to declare itself the arbiter of 'truth' but we certainly do not have a period at the end of our headlines and we down-style (no caps except for first letter and proper names). --SVTCobra 23:06, 19 January 2018 (UTC)