User talk:CactusJack8310

-- Wikinews Welcome (talk) 17:17, 5 December 2023 (UTC)


 * 😎 CactusJack8310 (talk) 17:18, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

Re version 1 - shooting story
Re version 1

Hi, I would suggest to make the following changes before the story can be published


 * add more details in the first paragraph to answer the Who, where, when, why, what, how in the said first paragraph - including clarify what the location is
 * remove external links like [1] from article body
 * add quantity of people hospitalized, quantity of people dead
 * correct formatting of the sources URLs in the end of the article

Please let me know if you need help. Gryllida (talk) 06:02, 12 December 2023 (UTC)


 * Note it happened quite a while ago, would it be possible to add any fresh developments (if added, specify dates in the text)? Thanks, Gryllida (talk) 06:02, 12 December 2023 (UTC)