User talk:Cailinkramer

-- Wikinews Welcome (talk) 00:37, 4 August 2013 (UTC)

UoW?
Are you a UoW student? If so, please add to your |user page. --Pi zero (talk) 04:52, 9 August 2013 (UTC)

Welsh Paralympian Chris Hallam dies
I have reviewed Welsh Paralympian Chris Hallam dies and left feedback at Talk:Welsh Paralympian Chris Hallam dies. The facts around his death are not readily available, so the ones that are there and important, like where he was living when he died, need to be emphasized more. Words like pioneer need to be avoided unless there are facts that clearly support it, and the text does not. (He won 16 Paralympic medals and that is a huge accomplishment, yet the article does not reference that.) The article feels vague, and not clear. It almost feels like in order to avoid plagiarism, key and important adjectives towards understanding concepts are left out... which in effect makes it difficult to understand. --LauraHale (talk) 07:33, 19 August 2013 (UTC)

Screencasts of some of today's reviews
The six videos are screencasts of reviews done today. As a whole, all the articles have improved tremendously from when they students first submitted. Now, they have infoboxes. They usually have a relevant picture, most of the time giving credit to the photographer. They more often than not have categories. The external links are not in the body. The sources are more consistently and better formatted. These little changes make a huge difference for motivation when reviewing because they show reviewers students are listening to feedback and attempting to get things published according to community standards.

That said, the current issues get to the more difficult spot of issues with making sure inverted pyramid style reporting is done, plagiarism and very close paragraphing need to be better avoided, facts need to match facts conveyed in sources, and relative dating needs to be better done. These are on one level the much harder part of doing good reporting on Wikinews. The screencasts of reviews included from the batch I reviewed this morning are more so you can see that what we are (I am) thinking when we are (I am) reviewing. This may not be educational in terms of teaching you how to report, but it might give you insight into what we are looking for. Hopefully that can be a little bit helpful in terms of understanding what we as a community on Wikinews are looking for in publishable works. --LauraHale (talk) 11:31, 19 August 2013 (UTC)

New lead under investigation in six-year-old Madeleine McCann case
Hi. Rather than not ready New lead under investigation in six-year-old Madeleine McCann case, I have moved it back to the draft stage to give reporters time to address the comments on the talk page as these will need to be handled before the article is ready for publication anyway. I would also suggest looking at the article's history to see what changes other community members have made. Looking at the individual edits should give you a better idea of what sort of things reviewers are looking for. --LauraHale (talk) 16:49, 14 October 2013 (UTC)

Seven Group announced they are cutting 630 positions
Hi. I reviewed Seven Group announced they are cutting 630 positions at Talk:Seven Group announced they are cutting 630 positions. When writing articles, it is best practice to repeatedly read the sources until you understand what they are saying. After you understand the meaning, then write the article. Please do not copy-and-paste from sources (outside direct quotes) and then change a few words. On Wikinews, that still constitutes plagiarism and it should be avoided. If you feel the need to do that, consider going back and reading the source a few more times, writing what you think is accurate, checking that against the sources. If necessary, then consider copying-and-pasting no more than two or three words that are needed because there is absolutely no other way to word something. --LauraHale (talk) 10:57, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

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You haven't run away, have you? Hang in there! Keep contributing! --Bddpaux (talk) 15:23, 18 November 2013 (UTC)