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Welcome Delexmer
Thank you for your contribution to the article about National Human Trafficking Awareness Day! Crtew (talk) 03:13, 12 January 2012 (UTC)

Guns article
Delexmer,

The article is nowhere near ready for submission. First, the headline carries a "Point of View", whereas Wikinews prides itself in being neutral and lives by the same "Non Point of Vew," or NPOV, philosophy as Wikipedia. Second, you don't have a clear lead. About the lead, did LCAV just release this information recently or did you dig it up? The time element is not at all clear but it is a basic point of the news. Third, Do you have anything current event to link this data to? The ones you produce are from March. You always need currency. Finally, for now, I don't see your original sources; who did you interview? Please don't submit articles so quickly before looking over them carefully for basic problems. Were you going to have an infographic for this article? These ar just some of the questions I have. Crtew (talk) 19:09, 17 April 2012 (UTC)

Eek, I should have said above that I pulled the article from review.Crtew (talk) 19:28, 17 April 2012 (UTC)

Horses
Delexmer,

Just skimmed the first draft. You need a straight lead about the roster of the horses for the Kentucky Derby, May 4, "being determined." I'm not sure how the roster is determined, and I bet most readers don't know either. You could clarify. Do any of the horses have a good back story? Is one more popular than others? Who is favored? Who has the pedegree? These are just some questions that in the past have produced a lead. Are all the horses determined or are there still more to come? If more, then explain how and when.Crtew (talk) 19:21, 17 April 2012 (UTC)

The article also has two glaring problems: First, the headline doesn't pull people in, and don't forget this is international. Rename. Second, I don't see any sources for verification. Wikinews requires at least two sources for this purpose.Crtew (talk)

Based on your knowledge of horses, you should have some sources to interview about the line up.Crtew (talk) 19:30, 17 April 2012 (UTC)