User talk:Egdowen

-- 07:01, 2 August 2011 (UTC)

American hikers sentenced to eight years by Iran
I'm afraid I've just failed this again.

I corrected the formatting of your presser source from congress, re-sorted the sources - so the one from the 28th proves it isn't stale. But, as a news article you must lead with what is new. Then you can go into more depth. --Brian McNeil / talk 16:52, 31 August 2011 (UTC)

American hikers to be free in two days
Hi. There were some difficulties with your article; see my comments on its talk page. You may also be interested in the edits I made to the article during review,. --Pi zero (talk) 18:15, 13 September 2011 (UTC)

Chicago Public Schools to resume after strike
Hi! I've tried to rescue this article from deletion as stale, but quite a bit more work on it is needed.

There are a number of concerns I see with it which you could help with, and need to bear in mind for future submissions:
 * Too-close-phrasing.
 * You can't near-verbatim lift from sources, even where they are press releases. Quotes, yes; someone else's text, no. Such is generally seen as plagiarism.


 * Neutrality.
 * From what I see, you had relied very heavily on the union's side of the story. I find it hard to believe the school board and mayor's office were not providing information which should have been included.


 * Repetition.
 * I suspect through the way you crafted the article, you repeated several facts over and over - such as the 1st strike in 25 years item.

Please see what you can do to further improve the article's latter sections. --Brian McNeil / talk 12:06, 21 September 2012 (UTC)