User talk:Isabelle Chesher

-- Wikinews Welcome (talk) 09:33, 4 August 2013 (UTC)

TEPCO releases first figures on the extent of Fukushima leakage‎
Hi. I have reviewed TEPCO releases first figures on the extent of Fukushima leakage‎ and left feedback at Talk:TEPCO releases first figures on the extent of Fukushima leakage‎. The video to the left gives a view of this review somewhat so you can see some of what I was looking at, why I made the changes I did and why it was not readied. The current problems are not all together that difficult to fix... but other things like copyright and factual support from the sources have not even been looked at. The article also has problems with passive voice that need fixing and this is not mentioned as much in the review as it could be. In any case, please fix these things as soon as possible and resubmit for review. --LauraHale (talk) 06:32, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

user page
I feel a little silly pointing this out here, but didn't want to intrude further on your user page, having already taken the liberty of adding the UoW student template: the name of the project is Wikinews rather than WikiNews (i.e., the "n" is lower case). :-) --Pi zero (talk) 00:09, 7 August 2013 (UTC)

Pakistani President convinces Prime Minister to put all state executions on hold
I have reviewed Pakistani President convinces Prime Minister to put all state executions on hold and left feedback at Talk:Pakistani President convinces Prime Minister to put all state executions on hold. The article has problems with source verification. Not all the facts match with the article text. It is difficult to figure out how to remove these facts without losing most of the major text. Please check to make sure all the facts match the text. --LauraHale (talk) 08:22, 19 August 2013 (UTC)

Screencasts of some of today's reviews
The six videos are screencasts of reviews done today. As a whole, all the articles have improved tremendously from when they students first submitted. Now, they have infoboxes. They usually have a relevant picture, most of the time giving credit to the photographer. They more often than not have categories. The external links are not in the body. The sources are more consistently and better formatted. These little changes make a huge difference for motivation when reviewing because they show reviewers students are listening to feedback and attempting to get things published according to community standards.

That said, the current issues get to the more difficult spot of issues with making sure inverted pyramid style reporting is done, plagiarism and very close paragraphing need to be better avoided, facts need to match facts conveyed in sources, and relative dating needs to be better done. These are on one level the much harder part of doing good reporting on Wikinews. The screencasts of reviews included from the batch I reviewed this morning are more so you can see that what we are (I am) thinking when we are (I am) reviewing. This may not be educational in terms of teaching you how to report, but it might give you insight into what we are looking for. Hopefully that can be a little bit helpful in terms of understanding what we as a community on Wikinews are looking for in publishable works. --LauraHale (talk) 11:31, 19 August 2013 (UTC)

Spy article
I just wanted to say specifically to you that although some of your wording changes were a bit niggly here-and-there, you did well at moving certain sentences toward 'active voice'. It's not common for a college student to be so skilled at doing that. Active voice is a very slippery critter! It gets away from you easily! --Bddpaux (talk) 05:55, 9 November 2013 (UTC)

Typhoon article
Don't run away!! You're probably feeling the frustration of the submitting vs. publication strain. It's just a part of journalism. Hang in there!! There is plenty of news taking place right at this very moment- about all the stuff going on in the Philippines.....trust me!! You can even just move some of this article's stuff over to THAT article....so long as the new article is built upon fresh news. See how that works?? --Bddpaux (talk) 18:53, 13 November 2013 (UTC)