User talk:Jmacdissi

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Digital security researchers publicly reveal vulnerability in WPA2 WiFi protocol
Hello. Your article about WPA2 vulnerability was published. Due to things in real life, I could not get to it earlier. There were some problems, which most of the newbies face:
 * 1) Like for the headline. The headline should be unique, and should convey some crucial information. In this case, "WiFi encryption protocol flawed", mentioning the name of the protocol and/or who claimed it was flawed would have been a better idea.
 * 2) Apart from that, the article content should not be bundled in a paragraph. Related information goes to same paragraphs.
 * 3) The first paragraph of the article contains most of the information, and it is called lede. The lede answers Ws and H questions. I had to rewrite the article, but it was built around your content. Have a look at the edit history, I segregated the content, and added more information to tighten the lede, and the other paragraphs. I remember when my first article had information lying loosely, here and there. It took me some time, to know how it should be done. Yours was way better than mine.
 * 4) The minimal length is three medium-sized paragraphs. Yours was marginally above it, but I added more content.

The article was reviewed by Pi zero. I suggest you to have a look at the editing history. One can learn a lot just by observing how things are done. This would help you for other articles that you write. I hope to see your articles soon. And yes, this story was being discussed on ##deutsche IRC channel on October 16. I thought about writing it, but could not. Thank you for writing this article. Also, if you need some help, ping me, or Pi zero. acagastya PING ME! 08:54, 20 October 2017 (UTC)