User talk:Lightsourcer

-- Wikinews Welcome (talk) 01:23, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

Thai Buddhist Meditation Master Sounds Alarm on Internet Induced Climate Change
Hi. I looked this over and wrote up a set of review comments. --Pi zero (talk) 04:13, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

opinion
"The alarm about climate change has been sounding from scientists and politicians for decades." is presented as an opinion -- that this fact is 1) true and 2) important. While personally I find it both true and important, some people don't. It is better to reword this sentence to make it more neutral.

Also, as it is background, per the inverted pyramid layout this sentence might belong to one of the last paragraphs, not the first one.

--Gryllida (talk) 04:13, 21 April 2019 (UTC)

you help to restructure would be appreciated.

Thank you

Lightsourcer (talk) 04:51, 21 April 2019 (UTC)



Lightsourcer (talk) 05:10, 21 April 2019 (UTC)

mastership
Where you write " Thai Buddhist mediation master" it is a qualification. Whom is it recognised by? It would be great to know this.

To reply please click here.

--Gryllida (talk) 04:14, 21 April 2019 (UTC)

recognized by the Thailand National Office of Buddhism



Lightsourcer (talk) 04:49, 21 April 2019 (UTC)

verb tense
I think the article content should be in past tense. Could you please correct this? I would be glad to offer my help -- if you need it, please let me know. --Gryllida (talk) 04:16, 21 April 2019 (UTC)

Hi Gryllida I would be grateful for any help from you. This is an important topic for me and I would like to do my part by getting this information published. thank you very much Lightsourcer (talk) 04:34, 21 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Thank you for sharing the details of the qualification above. I have now corrected the verb tense, and added that information into the article.
 * The book was released a while ago, and the primary focus of the story is the quote “It is up to each one of us to stop feeding these cloud storage facilities and delete unnecessary digital data daily” from the mediation master, provided by The Bali Times. Is this correct?
 * Do you have a second source that speaks of the same quote or the same announcement? Please check. Two sources about the focus are required for publication.
 * Please let me know if you need any help. Gryllida (talk) 21:01, 21 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Do you have a second source that speaks of the same quote or the same announcement? Please check. Two sources about the focus are required for publication.
 * Please let me know if you need any help. Gryllida (talk) 21:01, 21 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Please let me know if you need any help. Gryllida (talk) 21:01, 21 April 2019 (UTC)

Hi Gryllida

thank you very much for your help. This has improved the article immensely.

I have also switched the "focus quote" between the earlier quote and the final quote to be the following:

“If all of us would spend 15 minutes a day deleting unnecessary digital data from social media and old emails, the world would cool down “

By this I have 2 sources

The Bali Times and



Lightsourcer (talk) 01:16, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Thank you for adding one more source. I have a suggestion how to improve. When you write this in the article
 * “If all of us would spend 15 minutes a day deleting unnecessary digital data from social media and old emails, the world would cool down “
 * it is opinion and it should be attributed rather than saying it in Wikinews' own voice (ref. neutrality). It would be great to address this in the article before it is reviewed. Please let me know if you need any help with this as I would be glad to offer it if needed. Gryllida (talk) 06:00, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
 * it is opinion and it should be attributed rather than saying it in Wikinews' own voice (ref. neutrality). It would be great to address this in the article before it is reviewed. Please let me know if you need any help with this as I would be glad to offer it if needed. Gryllida (talk) 06:00, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
 * it is opinion and it should be attributed rather than saying it in Wikinews' own voice (ref. neutrality). It would be great to address this in the article before it is reviewed. Please let me know if you need any help with this as I would be glad to offer it if needed. Gryllida (talk) 06:00, 22 April 2019 (UTC)

Hi Gryllida

great point. Thanks

I have changed to the following:

Acharavadee told to The Bali Times Newspaper that “If all of us would spend 15 minutes a day deleting unnecessary digital data from social media and old emails, the world would cool down".

Lightsourcer (talk) 06:10, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
 * 1) I would suggest to change the headline as calling this announcement an 'alarm' suggests that this announcement (i) has been delivered to many people, and (ii) is both urgent and important. I think we do not have evidence for either of these qualities. I would suggest
 * Thai Buddhist meditation master introduces "Internet induced climate change" in an interview with Bali Times
 * Please let me know if you would like any assistance with the rename.
 * 2) I have issues with the relevance of the story -- it affects only one person (see relevance). I have raised the question of relevance at Water cooler/assistance hoping someone can help out with confirming this concern, but please check the "relevance" link provided above as it may give you some hints.
 * It may be that this issue can prevent the story from publication; if this occurs, I would offer you any possible help with the writing of your next story. Gryllida (talk) 10:52, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
 * 2) I have issues with the relevance of the story -- it affects only one person (see relevance). I have raised the question of relevance at Water cooler/assistance hoping someone can help out with confirming this concern, but please check the "relevance" link provided above as it may give you some hints.
 * It may be that this issue can prevent the story from publication; if this occurs, I would offer you any possible help with the writing of your next story. Gryllida (talk) 10:52, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
 * It may be that this issue can prevent the story from publication; if this occurs, I would offer you any possible help with the writing of your next story. Gryllida (talk) 10:52, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
 * It may be that this issue can prevent the story from publication; if this occurs, I would offer you any possible help with the writing of your next story. Gryllida (talk) 10:52, 22 April 2019 (UTC)

Yes could you please help me change the title.

Meditation Master warns world about Climate Change

I will edit the piece for relevance

Lightsourcer (talk) 11:16, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Visit this page to do the rename. Does it work for you or does it give you an error? Gryllida (talk) 11:57, 22 April 2019 (UTC)

yes error - don't have permission to move.

thanks

Lightsourcer (talk) 12:36, 22 April 2019 (UTC)


 * I believe your account is too young for page-move; likely you'll have that privilege in a few days. --Pi zero (talk) 15:24, 22 April 2019 (UTC)