User talk:Redchiefkevin

-- 03:02, 22 October 2011 (UTC)

Mostly calm in Liverpool-Man U match

 * I was in the process of adding a few remarks to explain why this could not pass review when you submitted it.
 * Consequently, I've marked it as "not ready".
 * The biggest issue is you've used two reports from the same source (BBC Sport).
 * next, you've not even mentioned the sport. Nor have you explained why the match being "mostly calm" is newsworthy. We've a global audience, not just one made up of Man U and Liverpool fans.
 * If you find an independent source, I'd approach the article as follows:
 * The lede (opening paragraph) gives the match result, covering the sport, which country it's in, and makes mention of the game being completed without incident.
 * Your second/third paragraphs details who scored when, who got red/yellow cards, etc.
 * You put the controversy that could have seen the match "not calm" in context with another paragraph or two (here's where you detail who wasn't included.
 * Hope this helps. --Brian McNeil / talk 13:25, 23 September 2012 (UTC)