Wikinews talk:Briefs/March 31, 2012

Script review
This version of the script is ready for recording. Blood Red Sandman (Talk)   (Contribs) 13:44, 31 March 2012 (UTC)

I did some heavy editing for reading. I did add some detail to the Hong Kong election brief so that it would make sense. I think it's important that the listener know that the chief executive is selected by an electoral college process because this puts the demonstrations somewhat in context.

I added info about the Time magazine story and combined it with the story where Fluke appeared with Clinton in New York.

Instead of the news, I gave a teaser for the archery stories on Wikinews. "We have more on Austrialian sports at Wikinews, including more about this week's qualifications by Australian archers for the World Archery Field Championships in August."

Since the story appeared in Wikinews this week the lottery sum went up and winners were produced from this week's drawing. I think it makes sense to write this in a way that the sum surpassed 500 million and that wins had been determined. Otherwise it will sound out of date and uninformed. Suggestions?

Second script review
I made changes in a few sections.

Although I'm usually a stickler for not introducing anything beyond the summarized article, I agree with previous reviewer's point about the further development on the Lottery story; so, no objection to that (though I did make an unrelated copyedit on that section, I believe).

As of this moment, I consider the current script clear. --Pi zero (talk) 23:04, 31 March 2012 (UTC)